Today our Teacher (Ms Komor) asked us to write a story about a picture. This is what I wrote. Tell me your opinions and what you think about it in the comments. I did enjoy doing this because it was relaxing knowing that you could just write any way you wanted, I didn't dislike anything because I just really enjoyed writing the way I wanted to write. My next steps will to be re reading it out loud because some parts of my story didn't make sense.
MY STORY ...........
The wind rushed through her hair as she descended the mountain at great speed. For most children this would be an exhilarating, even a terrifying experience. But for lucy it was just an ordinary journey to school.
Lucy was about 15 years old, she lived high up on a very green mountain in a thick forest in Vietnam. She went to a small and very nice school in her local town/village, she was a very smart girl she topped nearly all her classes except math. Her school was like mine small and local but her school had a bit more students.
Lucy woke up at 6:25am every morning to get to school on time, she had a lot of chores and things to do before going to school. Thursday morning Lucy woke up a bit later than usual instead of waking up at 6:25am she woke up at 6:39am, once Lucy woke up and realized the time she rushed out of bed and quickly went for the fastest shower she had ever had. Her mother shouted out at her “LUCY QUICKLY YOUR GONNA BE LATE!!” Lucy shouted back “I KNOW I'M TRYING!!”.
Lucy quickly finished her shower and threw on her uniform and ran down the stairs, threw on her shoes grabbed her things and said to her mother “I LOVE YOU GOT TO GO NOW BYE!!” her mother replied “I love you t” but Lucy had already slammed and ran out the door. But she remembered she had to get the bag of crops so she slammed open the door and ran in and grabbed the crops her mother smiled and waved bye to Lucy.
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Lucy ran down the steep mountain track through the forest as fast as she could without slipping over, she saw her zipline and quickly but on the harness and zipped down the line, she loved going down the zipline because it gave her a breathtaking thrill but as she liked to call it “a horrifying eye popping thrill”, but Lucy loved going to school like this because it was fast and fun.
By the time she got off the zipline it was 7:19am she jumped off and ran down a small hill, she quickly jumped on her yellow bike and peddled as fast as she could to school, it took about an hour on her to bike to her school, she arrived at school at 8:34am she put her crops in her locker and quickly found her friends before walking into her class.
It was 3:10pm and the end of school bell rang, Lucy hugged her friends good bye and waved she quickly grabbed her crops before going into town to sell them. In her bag she had fruits and vegetables like bananas, cabbage, potatoes that her and her mother grew while her father was out working to support them.
She got into town at 3:23pm and pulled out a sheet to put her fruits and vegetables, she sat there for hours trying to sell all her fruits and vegetables she sold some but she did have a lot left over.
She biked home at 5:51pm and got back home at 7:12pm, she gave her mother the money she got a very good amount of money 18 dongs and 15 dollars 240,000 dongs her mother was happy and satisfied because it could pay their power and get them food for the rest of the year.
What's your favourite type of writing?
ENJOY!!
THE IMAGE THAT THIS STORY WAS BASED ON -
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